One For Sorrow

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Title: One For Sorrow
Author name: Ravenstone raven_rs
Artist name: ILWB inlovewithboth
Genre: Het
Characters/Pairing: Bodie, Doyle/OFC, Cowley, OCs
Word count: 61,635
Warnings: Torture, violence, graphic het sex scene

Summary: Bodie and Doyle have to babysit a retired assassin who is being targeted by unknown assailants. Cowley wants to use the opportunity to draw out the would-be assassin.

Bodie and Doyle take their charge from one 'safe' place to another, but cannot shake the would-be assassins. The undeniable conclusion is that there is a leak somewhere, but finding that leak may cost the life of the one they are paid to protect

And what do you call assassins who accuse assassins anyway? My friend...
Assassing
Where are the prophets? Where are the visionaries? Where are the poets to preach the dawn of the Sentimental Mercenary?
Fugazi
Marillion

Notes: Huge thanks to ILWB for a fantastic video. And huge thanks to Shirl and Sabs – proof-readers extraordinaire - and the rest of the Magnificent Seven for support and encouragement, and sometimes flat out nagging. It's all your fault, guys.

Link to Video by ILWB: One For Sorrow Trailer Vid
Link to 4Shared video (if copyright issues exist in your country) : One For Sorrow Trailer Vid


Chapter 1 / Chapter 2 / Chapter 3 / Chapter 4 / Chapter 5 / Chapter 6 / Chapter 7 / Chapter 8 / Chapter 9 / Chapter 10 / Chapter 11 / Chapter 12



Link to ereader: E-reader Files (Right click to download files)

Comments

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

"Warnings: graphic het sex scene"
*shivers(in anticipation)* :-)

But is there maybe a download possibility for the vid?
Again the same trouble as usual: "This video contains content from UMG. It is not available in your country."

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Damn. I'll ask ILWB if there's another link.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

ILWB has put a link to 4Shared on the YouTube page. Apparently, there are YouTube issues in Germany. Normal service will be resumed when we've established what 'normal' means.... :)

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

I can't even reach the Youtube page with the vid, Youtube redirects me immediately to an overview page. And at her own Youtube site, I can't find a link.
Damn copyrights!!! :-(

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Damn and blast YouTube! Okay, I've asked ILWB for the link so either she'll post it, or if she gives me the link, I'll try to work out how to put it in the coding as an alternative.

Sorry about this.

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

Thanks!
And I'm just reading - it's great!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Cool! Hope you enjoy it! Thanks for reading

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I like the vid. The female character is cut into it to make her fit seamlessly. Good job. It looks like an exciting story. Thanks!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

I just hope the story lives up to the vid! It's a great video. The song is perfect.

[krisserci5.livejournal.com]

So glad you got here and the vid really matches the story. Nice work.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

The video is excellent.

[inlovewithboth.livejournal.com]

Sorry everybody, here's the 4shared link in case your country is blocked by You Tube.

http://www.4shared.com/video/zG_07k9P/oneforsorrow3.html

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

Thank you!
A very atmospheric video. Full of action and adventure.
And I like the woman you've chosen... :-)

[inlovewithboth.livejournal.com]

She just seemed to fit 'Magpie' somehow, as did the music. Glad you liked it.

[bodie4me.livejournal.com]

Hell, there's so much I love about ONE FOR SORROW...I'm going to have a hard time "cutting to the chase" ;o)
First of all it's an incredibly intense, gripping, action packed story that would have made a fantastic movie.
Bodie and Doyle are spot on! I SO enjoyed every bit of dialogue, banter and even non verbal exchange between them. It's simply a brilliant portrayal of their unique partnership.
Maggie is an intriguing, exciting, mysterious character. I so loved the rapport she had with Bodie! And that "graphic het sex scene" is just to die for...beautifully and perfectly written...*sigh*
The torture scene had me wincing and flinching...it is SO bloody good and convincing.
Oh and I was very worried about Bodie in chapter 7 and 8! And the ending, which is revealed in the epilogue, is amazing, a great twist!
See! I KNEW I would start to ramble...SORRY! Let me just say that ILWB's vid matched this fantastic story perfectly. I adore the song, it's one of my all time favourites.I absolutely love the atmosphere of the vid, the pics and colours that were chosen. And strong, beautiful Kate Beckinsale just fits in perfectly.
*HAPPYSIGH*

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Blimey. What can I say to a review like that, but - "The cheque's in the post" LOL!!

Thank you so much for your kind words. I'm more pleased than I could possibly describe that you enjoyed it, and that you took the time to write such a wonderful review. I'm blown away. Thank you so much!

[inlovewithboth.livejournal.com]

Do you think she liked it?

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Nah. But I think the bribe worked ;)

[sc-fossil.livejournal.com]

I think you did a very nice job with your story. It's much like I'd expect an episode to be, with an exciting story line to follow. You did a good job fleshing out your OCs so that each personality came through. The lads and Cowley worked together like clockwork. Thank you.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for reading it, and your kind words. I'm glad you found it exciting, and like an episode. Thank you.

[inlovewithboth.livejournal.com]

The moment I read this story I knew exactly what video it needed, the inspiration just flooded out. It's so hard to write a believable OC but Magpie is definately one of those. I love the relationship she forms with both Bodie and Doyle. There are too many fave scenes to quote any, but it's enough to say this is a great story and I'm honoured to have been part of it.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Aww shucks, mate. You were brilliant. The vid is magnificent. The words fit the story so well, the pictures fit - spot on.

[mysteriousaliwz.livejournal.com]

I thought Magpie was an excellent OC, and you've created an exciting and compelling story that kept me engrossed right to the end.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

That's very kind of you. Thank you for reading, and for the lovely feedback.

Blue-eyed and Beautiful and Mop Top

[firlefanzine.livejournal.com]

That was great, from start to finish!
(Well, again I closed my eyes when it came to the torture scenes... :-O)

It's not only a case story where Doyle sleeps with the female character.
(And I wouldn't call it 'het'. 'Het' implicates for me a longer relationship, including all-days problems and routine – that's far from it.)
I think it's a very clever character study of the three protagonists, without ever losing the focus on the close relationship between Bodie and Doyle.
But also without being repetitive or boring.

Magpie is a professional killer. She is also the God-daughter of Cowley.
Bodie is behaviour shows a mixture of understanding, even admiration and protective instinct.
He likes Maggie and they've found a teasing basis.
Doyle hates the (cop) killer Magpie but he is somehow fascinated and learns to accept her – and the reasons why she had chosen that way...

What I like best is the perfect and teasing banter between Bodie and Doyle, but also between them and Maggie. :-)

"Bodie affected shock. It was easy to play off her, he knew. Verbal sparring to hide real concern, and silly words of mock love where friendly affection had begun. It was like playing with a kid sister. Flirting without danger.
"Don't tell Ray," he whispered. "He'd be heartbroken."
"Want you all to himself, does he?"
"Well, can you blame him?"

(That was the slashers-teaser... :-P)

BTW – I think Cowley is spot-on too. Ruthless and politically incorrect, but never mean – just the way we like him! :-)
I caught my breath when he gave his God-daughter a gun, so that she 'won't be alive', when he hands her over to her enemies...
"“They never stipulated that you be alive for the trade,” he said, his voice soft and silken."
*gulps*

Yes, a thrilling story! Thank you!

Re: Blue-eyed and Beautiful and Mop Top

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Wow! Thanks! What a review. Very kind of you, even if you did skip the torture ;) Which wasn't even [i]that[/i] bad.... honest....

I had great fun with the characters. I'm so glad you think I got them right.

So glad you enjoyed the story!

[saintvic.livejournal.com]

ILWB - love this video, the music and the scenes are great and they really make me want to read the story.

And I am really looking forward to giving this a read.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thanks. Hope you enjoy it!

[1moreirene.livejournal.com]

Ravenstone and Inlovewithboth, thank you for posting!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thank you for reading!

[andreathelion.livejournal.com]

What a brilliant story, it could have been easily a canon one :D
And the accompanying vid just matches perfectly.

Thanks to both of you for the fantastic work!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Aw shucks, thanks! Glad you enjoyed it.

[ci5mates.livejournal.com]

Fantastic story Rave and brilliant vid ILWB. A great combo that compliments each other beautifully. It was a fast paced, racy story which kept me wanting more. Cowley was his diabolical self and our lads were just as they should be...deadly, in sink and very hot. I loved their moral dilemma and the way they grew to understand Magpie and her motivation. Well done Rave, a great read, love ya work! :-)

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Aw shucks! Thanks, mate! Glad you enjoyed it.

[jgraeme2007.livejournal.com]

What a fun, action-packed video! I love the use of Kate Beckinsale!

I'm behind on my reading, and I don't want to rush through such a long, meaty read, but the story is off to a very strong start.

Great title, by the way.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Sorry it's taken me a while to reply - I've been away. Glad you like the video and enjoyed the beginning. I hope the rest lives up to it!

[jaicen5.livejournal.com]

A very well written and rounded story, very much in an episode format. It would have made a great episode but ILWB's vid was a good substitute. I really like the lads interaction, your dialogue is spot on, can hear them quite clearly in my mind. I like Cowley and his relationship with his god daughter, I like the story line. Can't wait for more of your stuff. Thanks for answering the challenge.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Wow! Thanks for reading. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

I'm just amazed anyone's read it, to be honest!

[jgraeme2007.livejournal.com]

"So what now?"
Bodie took a long drink of tea. "Wait."
"For what?"
He turned his sapphire gaze to Doyle. "For some miserable bastard to make a mistake."
Doyle gave a rueful smile, raising his mug to his lips. "Let's just hope it's not us."
"I'll drink to that."

Nice exchange there. Very lad-like.

I finally got a chance to finish this. I liked it a lot -- it did feel very much like an actual episode, but with an actual attempt to make sense. ;-D (Not that I don't dearly love the eps.)

Anyway, I enjoyed this -- I'm very glad you contributed to the Big Bang!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading and commenting.

[moth2fic.livejournal.com]

A very impressive contribution from both of you!

A long, meaty story, with the lads and Cowley comletely in character. I loved the banter between Ray and Bodie all the way through. This was probably worthy of more than one episode - maybe a two part story?

And the vid is awesome!

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Funny you should say that.... ;) There *is* a sequel, and a third, fourth and maybe even fifth on the way. But it's probably not what you'd expect....

Thank you for taking the time to read it. It is much longer than I intended, and I expected the length to put people off, so I'm very grateful to anyone who took the time to wade through it all. And I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. Makes it all worthwhile!

Thanks!

[shooting2kill.livejournal.com]

Discovering new writers in Pros (at least new to me) is so exciting and I'm really chuffed that after all these years the fandom is still attracting people such as you with good, quality stories and stories which are original, never an easy task.

I really enjoyed this and especially loved the banter between Magpie and the lads, it was really *them*: It earned her another approving nod, the black eyebrows raised over the blue eyes. His bottom lip formed itself into a thoughtful pout. He turned to Doyle. “Audi Quattro. Bottle of Laphroaig, and a Beretta. I think I’m in love.”

And I liked the character herself, intriguing and again, very original.

I thought this was a great story: tense, action-packed and well written - like an episode but with the added pleasure of reading their thoughts and having more jokes!
Thanks so much for your time and effort.

[raven-rs.livejournal.com]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed the story, the banter and the characters. It's such a relief to hear I got it right!